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Old July 16, 2001, 18:21   #1
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Here you can take your best shot to disgrace verbally my story.
The stage is yours.

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Old July 17, 2001, 00:05   #2
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I guess no one would believe me if I told them I was planning a story along these lines? Anyway, good job Kass. Keep up the good work.
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Old July 17, 2001, 14:23   #3
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I wouldn't be insulted at all if you'd write something of the similar idea. Would be nice to have a different POV. But I wouldn't know about other's opinions...
Well, "the fast live", or something like that.
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Old July 20, 2001, 09:43   #4
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Since you've written more, I thought I'd write you a whole comment.

It is a very good story and I'm really impressed that you can write in English better than a lot of English people!

You have an interesting concept and the story is feasible too. I especially like the accurate future science because that always helps in science fiction, for me anyway.

Looking forward to more.

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Old July 20, 2001, 16:44   #5
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Well I never liked that Star Wars -scifi where they could just about everything. And Star Trek has similar tendencies.
I'm balancing between two possible endings, a very surprisive one and a very "boring" one. I think I'll do the boring one and then smack the reader with the "suprisive" one after that. Stay tight!
I thought that the language would be a problem, but then I noticed that for one Finnish verb there are three English equals, so I guess it won't became too repeatitive.
There are plans for a part II of the story, which is of course early 'cause I haven't finished it yet.
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Old July 22, 2001, 14:57   #6
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Good Story.
Keep up the good work!
I love to see new writings in the AC section
...sorry that I don't have time to read every story however.
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Old July 23, 2001, 16:03   #7
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If anyone's interested, I'm going to write Part II. Maybe in a new thread, maybe in the old one. But "The Conclusion" is from now on only "Chapter Nine".
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I'm glad you are going to write some more, cause I'm hooked on the story. I have to know what the Earthers are like.
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Old July 23, 2001, 17:28   #9
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They aren't gonna be that bad, I think... Heck, it's just forming up in my head. Gotta get some typing down.
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Kassiopeia, Great stuff! I eagerly await the conclusion. Your writing is balanced, the characters easily identified with, and the plot is both believable and suspenseful.

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Old July 25, 2001, 00:56   #11
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This is seriously one of the best SMAC stories i ever read Its very interesting. this is the first SMAC story that actually cause a peticuliar feeling which i cannot identify with words, mainly when mentioned that the ISS Homeworld got shot down....very rare i get that feeling from a story/movie/etc.... you can say it also feels so outer limits like too

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This you can say it also feels so outer limits like too
Outer Limits has been on air in Finnish television for a couple of months... I too can't sleep when Earth is accidentally whacked by human mistakes...
What you described is exactly what I sought after, and I'm glad I succeeded! I'm getting something alike to the end of Part II, which is REALLY the last part ever never
PS. The story is now finished, enjoy!
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Kass, just finished reading the exciting and morbid conclusion! I liked the flip-flop back and forth between locations especially. you got mean at the end! Congrats on finishing this great story.

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