January 14, 2003, 00:52
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Prince
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You did kinda get trigger happy with the ....'s, vovanism has a point, it broke the flow. But still a very enjoyable read.
Again, I look forward to another war story from the classical age from you, or any story for that matter. 
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January 14, 2003, 04:45
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Emperor
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Sheer brilliance
Some typos and stuff I agree with vovan, but none the less a truly wonderful story.
Thanks for giving us such a good read and dont be too long with some more of the same.
Chris 
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January 14, 2003, 20:41
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Chieftain
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Thank you Vovanism. I myself agree on the "..." thing. I did go a bit "trigger happy" with that. As for the typos, Im usually writing when I have the spare time. Im sorry for those who thought less of the story, because of the of typos that I could of took the time to fix. I agree with you all 100 percent. (Don't worry, you havn't broken my writing spirit  ). Thanks once again .
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Last edited by Civ3King; January 14, 2003 at 22:57.
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January 15, 2003, 18:23
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Warlord
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Nice turnaround at the end! Definitely a well-written piece. Keep it up, Civ3King.
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January 15, 2003, 20:19
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Emperor
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Originally posted by Civ3King
(Don't worry, you havn't broken my writing spirit ).
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I am glad you still have the desire to write, Civ3King. Also, I would greatly appreciate it if you could read through my little creation, Postmortem: Two Thousand Years Later, and give your thoughts on it. Like what were the good parts, and which partes weren't particularly successful. And maybe point out some things that were particularly bad? Just like you, I would like to keep improving my style. So, I would appreciate your opinion.
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February 6, 2004, 21:58
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Emperor
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BIG BUMP lovely story this one if youve not seen this one before i highly reccomend it
Are you still around Civ3King ?
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February 9, 2004, 07:01
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Prince
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That is a great story, Chris thank you for brining this to our attention.
Civ3King, thank you.
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