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Old January 8, 2001, 15:55   #1
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Well, hello again.
Time to start anew. I've read through the first book of my little story, changed the order of some chapters, added some details.. and then I studied the first five chapters in detail, changing some wording and stuff like that. Here they are.

Oh, BTW. I'm up at chapter 64 at the moment. I took the pains to make one big file out of the entire story, pasting the chapters one by one into another document. Then I asked for some stats.. I've written over 90,000 words so far in this story! And there's more on the way [pauses for some insane, manic laughter]

I apologize beforehand for the heavy task of reading it all.. I hope you will enjoy it.
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Old January 9, 2001, 15:37   #2
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So you did NOT get tired with storywriting, I see .

There's always a place for you in the OT .
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Old January 10, 2001, 11:38   #3
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Hey. I liked your story. Looking forward to more. I went back to the first ones and liked what I read.

Yeah come join us in the OT. You might find some inspiration for different characters there.
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Old January 10, 2001, 12:18   #4
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I'm glad to see there's still some interest in my story. Sprayber, I've modified the story somewhat, so you might enjoy reading the first book as well.. though I haven't changed that much.. just the sequence of some events. Anyways, I'll post at a quite fast pace to reach where I left the story dangling, so maybe sometime next week we'll get to the new parts.
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Old January 10, 2001, 21:54   #5
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RM,

I'm glad you've reactivated Wizard of Chiron. You're just chuck full of good ideas, and you are able to weave them into a terrific story!

Welcome back!

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P.S. - there is no need to apologize when you are doing US a favor by posting!
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Old January 11, 2001, 11:43   #6
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Yay! This is one of my favorites. I'm glad it will be continued.
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Old January 11, 2001, 15:09   #7
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That's part fifteen posted. Not much has changed in parts eleven through fifteen, but then I can't remember everything I've done either. BTW, I suspect this story will be more than a hundred chapters long.

You have been warned. :P
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Old January 15, 2001, 08:50   #8
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Chapter 45 is the first of the chapters I haven't posted yet. So, I will post five chapters per day, up to and including friday. That way, chapter 46 will be posted sometime next week.

Happy reading!
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Old January 17, 2001, 06:45   #9
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Well, I could use a couple of names for some members of a probe-team, and I'm out of ideas.. any readers still willing to contribute their nickname to the story? ..Or any I have cruelly (but unintentionally)forgotten? :/

The first piece of the story is soon completely re-posted; Chapter 39 will begin what I call Book Two. It will be posted about a day from now.
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Old January 17, 2001, 11:09   #10
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You can use mine. I wouldn't mind being a bad guy. Even if that ment being killed horribly. Remember that it is Sprayber pronounced Spray.bur
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Old January 18, 2001, 01:59   #11
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quote:

Originally posted by Raging Mouse on 01-17-2001 05:45 AM
Well, I could use a couple of names for some members of a probe-team, and I'm out of ideas.. any readers still willing to contribute their nickname to the story? ..Or any I have cruelly (but unintentionally)forgotten? :/

The first piece of the story is soon completely re-posted; Chapter 39 will begin what I call Book Two. It will be posted about a day from now.


Yeah, you can do whatever you want with my name. I encourage you to use my name. Please use my name. I beg you to use my name. I pray you to use my name!
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Old January 18, 2001, 14:24   #12
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Oh, goody! I didn't have to advertise for the part of a villain!

Of course, the only absolute villain in the story is Beta... everyone else has an excuse. He has already died quite horribly once, so I wouldn't want to overdo the gory part..

Anyways. Thank you both.. LightEning, be seeing your nickname beginning from chapter 66.. Sprayber, you might have to wait just a tad longer than that.. I'll try and make it worthwile.

Now, on with the story! Tonight we close Book One, and continue with Book Two.. And tomorrow I'll post the first new chapter. Stay tuned!
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Old January 18, 2001, 17:47   #13
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Yay! It's about time this story got moving again!
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Old January 19, 2001, 08:52   #14
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Nice to have you back reading, Jasonian.

That's *huff* chapter 45 *huff* posted. *Wheeeezeeee...* I'll take it easier from now on, maybe posting a new chapter every other day, for as long as I've got chapters. Hang on, 'cause it'll get really interesting now!

Now Read On....
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Old January 19, 2001, 16:25   #15
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Back reading? I never stopped reading. I just stopped posting. I remember all of this (well... most of it anyway)
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Old January 19, 2001, 17:17   #16
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I hardly think this is "I never stopped reading":

LightEning 17.1.200 17:54 I wonder, do you still remember that you are the
governor of Free Drone Central?

Jasonian 17.1.200 21:39 ...Free Drone Central?

Crossfire Tales?

LightEning 17.1.200 22:07 Close, but no cigar. The Wizard of Chiron.

http://apolyton.net/forums/Forum14/HTML/000270.ht
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Jasonian 17.1.200 22:08 Wizard of Chiron! I remember that.
But... I was never in that...

LightEning 17.1.200 22:08 Well, check it for your name. You promised him
that he could use your name a few months ago
IIRC.

Jasonian 17.1.200 22:09 Hmm... I don't recal that, but it does sound like
something I would have done.

LightEning 17.1.200 22:12 "No shame in that. It adds more fun to the story
if you use other names.
Jasonian is a drone at heart. We would make a
good supervisor, in either the Free Drones
faction or the drone population of another
faction."

http://apolyton.net/forums/Forum14/HTML/000182.ht
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Jasonian 17.1.200 22:12 That sure sounds familiar.
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Old January 20, 2001, 22:04   #17
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Hey! It's not my fault he stopped writing so long ago that I forgot which story the Wizard of Chiron was!

Oh yes... he'll make a good villan.
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Old January 21, 2001, 18:01   #18
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You can use my username in the story... I thought you already had- but perhaps I'm confusing this with Alnistera's story???
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Old January 22, 2001, 01:35   #19
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Well, in any case I am glad to see that you're still enjoying the Wizard of Chiron.

Why will Sprayber be a good villain? I'm interested in hearing this.

EDIT:
BTW, enjoy chapter 46.
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Old January 22, 2001, 06:56   #20
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You must be; I haven't used your username.. yet. Thanx!
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Old January 24, 2001, 10:51   #21
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Ah... nothing like a good Monty Python reference to start the day.
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Old January 24, 2001, 19:57   #22
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Mouse:

What an incredible story! I've just recently stumbled on the Apolyton boards, and really enjoyed reading what you've posted thus far (gobbled it all up at once... I reckon that's what I get for being so greedy). Keep 'em comin'! Please!
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Old January 25, 2001, 07:50   #23
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There's plenty more to come.. especially now, that I've decided to cast some light on additional factions. You'll see

Anyways, thought I'd post two chapters today, since chapter 48 is too short (I think). Happy reading!
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I feel I should tell you, that chapter 52 is one of my personal favourites. That might explain why it's one of the longest ones, as well, but it's no excuse. I hope you enjoy it, as I definitely enjoyed writing it.

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Old January 31, 2001, 11:15   #25
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Very, very good... but I think you used the wrong name for Hubris at one point. (Or maybe it was the right name, but you didn't intend to reveal that yet??)

It's the paragraph that starts out, "The noise from the masses of cultists increases yet more, into a throbbing physical force."
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Thanks, Gregurabi, hadn't noticed that. That's what I get for doing five tasks at once, three of which involve writing. Feel free to point out any other mishaps.
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Old January 31, 2001, 14:25   #27
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WoW! That last chapter was really good. You described the scene really well. I was beginning to think the cult were a bunch of pushovers. The Hive doesn't look half bad compared to those guys. Keep the chapters comming.
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Raging Mouse:

Enjoyed the last few chapters. It looks like your setting some good action up. So I'll just keep reading and waiting for my character to pop up somewhere.
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Old March 2, 2001, 19:10   #29
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Must... have... more... WizardofChiron....
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Well, i have finally got around to start reading Wizard of Chiron last week...and throughout the week when i have time. I finish reading the chapters that are up. I like the story a lot )

is Hudris a empath clone of Dorothy? I like the Seven Seas Jimmy. He sure was around for quite awhile, and lucky/good at not getting himself killed too.

More Wizard of Chiron please, if possible

wish i was a good writer me have so many ideas, but suck at applying it in writing, since i suck in writing. always have sentence structure problems, spelling sometimes and trouble making things sound interesting or properly describe something. I rather draw to explain what i see. Visual person i am... and i like reading too.

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